Eliminate Hedging Words

“Words such as rather, pretty, very, and little are the leeches that infest the body of prose, sucking the blood of words. We should all try to do a little better, we should all be very watchful of this rule, for it is a rather important one and we are pretty sure to violate it now and then.” —- E.B. White

Empty introductions, hedges and modifiers are enemies of brevity. Maybe your readers could enjoy long-winded beginnings if they had the time, but hey, the light’s green. In your business writing, watch out for:

Empty Introductions

People often tack empty introductions to their points, perhaps because they fear that their point will not be well received.

Unfortunately, vacuous introductory phrases are more likely to annoy than placate your reader. Even worse, these phrases imply that you are insecure or uncertain of your point. When you write, avoid introductions like these:

  • the truth is that
  • it seems to me
  • apparently
  • it is obvious that
  • as I recall
  • the fact is that
  • I also want to say that

and all their meaningless cousins.

Hedges and Modifiers

We also fatten up our work by hedging our points with namby-pamby modifiers like:

  • very
  • pretty
  • little
  • rather
  • almost
  • likely
  • more or less
  • seemingly
  • somewhat
  • kind of
  • mostly
  • it would seem
  • in some respects
  • for the most part
  • for all intents and purposes

What’s wrong with hedges and modifiers? They block your points. If you are making a valid point clearly, then it is “apparent” “for all intents and purposes.”

As for words like “very” and “little”, notice as you read whether they really add anything to your comprehension, other than an uncomfortable sense that the writer is “protesting too much.”

Follow the advice of Strunk and White in their classic Elements of Style: “Cut! Cut! Cut!”

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